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Treatment Finale

Mike takes Althea and attempts to flee, but James and Sam cut him off. Mike releases Althea and hides in the shadows. Still under the control of the shadows, she attempts to stab James, but he stuns her with a Taser. While James is busy subduing her, Mike pops out of the shadows and attacks Sam, seriously injuring him. James is forced to shoot Mike to save Sam, but Mike isn’t killed by the shot. James tells Sam to take Althea and leave, which Sam does.

James and Mike fight among the shadows. Initially, Mike has the upper hand, seriously injuring his brother, but James eventually forces the shadows to possess him, draining them from the room and leaving Mike revealed in stark, colorless light. Even without the advantage, Mike attempts to attack James and James shoots him in the knee. Although his brother urges him to give up, Mike continues with his efforts to kill James and is killed himself when SWAT bursts into the room and guns him down. As Mike dies, the shadows abandon him and drain from James as well, returning color and darkness to the room, much to the surprise of the SWAT team.

Finally, James and Althea are seen exiting a courthouse on a sunny day. Leahy and Sam are waiting for them. James relates that all the charges against him have been dropped and our heroes walk off into the sunset, shadows stretching out behind them.

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And that’s that. I’ll start posting more random thoughts soon. Finals are over on the 15th.

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John on December 7th 2009 in Scripets and Treatments

Treatment #6

James advances further into the basement and finds most of the backup emergency lights have been smashed. Near the body of a uniformed cop, he finds a Maglite. Eugene attacks James with a crowbar. Eugene is at least partially under the control of the shadows, and is totally insane. He appears to think James is one of the nursing home residents. James and Eugene fight and James is eventually forced to shoot him.

In a parallel sequence, Mike shows up at James’ apartment. He attacks Althea and she clocks him with a desk drawer. Eventually he manages to overcome and abducts her.

Meanwhile, back at the police station, James meets back up with Sam. James attempts to call Althea, but only gets her voice mail, which is a recording of the whispers and laughter of the shadows. James and Sam boogie back to James’ apartment only to find it empty. James walks around his apartment, turning off lights until only one remains on. He cautions Sam to stay in the light, then calls out to the shadows. The shadows reply, taunting him about losing both Mike and Althea. The shadows eventually reveal their goal of breeding humans they can use as hosts. James mocks them, angering the shadows and tricks them into possessing him. He manages to retain control of his body and forces them into showing him where Mike and Althea are.

Mike has holed up at Sal’s mansion and has his thugs patrolling the grounds with SMGs. James calls Leahy for backup. While Sam and James wait for the backup, James explains a bit more about the shadows. He tells Sam that he’s figured out the shadows are basically powerless unless given a purpose, and wonders aloud if his brother has figured that out. SWAT backup arrives and engages Mike’s thugs in a gun battle. James and Sam use the distraction to sneak into the mansion.

Upstairs in the mansion, Althea and Mike lie asleep in bed, entwined like lovers. The gunfire from the battle between the thugs and the SWAT team wakes them and we can see Althea’s has have gone the solid gray of someone possessed by shadows. The shadows tell Mike that James is in the mansion and Mike decides to beat it.

Back downstairs, the shadows distract James while Danny tries to shoot him. Danny misses, but Sam shoots and kills Danny. James forces the shadows to tell him where Mike and Althea are and he and Sam go looking for them.

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John on December 6th 2009 in Scripets and Treatments

Treatment #5

James and Sam go to see Julio, who lives in a warehouse that is being renovated into apartments. The parking lot of the warehouse is full, but the place seems oddly deserted. James and Sam find Julio’s apartment – the only finished apartment in the building. The apartment door is unlocked and slightly ajar. Inside the men find a corpse they assume is Julio. The dead man has had his throat sliced. James steps forward (turning on a lamp to make more light) and the corpse turns to look at him. The shadows have animated Julio. He attempts to shoot and kill James and Sam. He manages to shoot Sam, but Sam has a Kevlar vest. James shoots out Julio’s kneecaps and drags Sam out of the apartment. The two men attempt to escape the warehouse when the shadow-animated bodies of murdered construction workers attack them. James notices that one of the workers is using a cutting torch for a weapon and shoots the gas canister it’s attached too, starting a fire and freaking out the shadows. This give James and Sam a chance to scoot and they take it. Outside, they block off the exit, trapping the dead workers and the shadows flee from the light and fire.

Back in their unmarked police car, Sam asks for an explanation for what he just saw. James explains about the shadows as best he can. He tells Sam that the shadows have no real will of their own and require someone to give them a purpose before they can do anything other than whisper. Rickles calls James and tells him to come into the station. Kelly’s body has been found and James and Sam are under suspicion for murdering her.

James and Sam go to the police station. On the way in they pass a cluster of uniformed cops struggling with a skinny man in a pink bathrobe. Rickles talks to another cop about the man in the pink bathrobe and we discover the fellow’s name is Eugene and he’s responsible for the slaughter of nursing home residents. Captain Leahy and Sgt. Rickles interrogate James and Sam about Kelly’s murder (Rickles is present as James’ union rep). The interrogation is interrupted by a report about an escaped prisoner (Eugene). The power dies in the building. Leahy locks James and Sam’s guns and badges in his desk, and tells them to stay put until the situation is over and the interrogation can resume. James tells Sam he suspects the shadows are behind the prisoner’s escape and they go looking for him.

James and Sam head downstairs to the basement and hear gunfire. In the basement they find the seriously wounded body of Rickles. James has Sam take Rickles to safety and, after taking Rickles’ sidearm, goes after the escaped prisoner alone.

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John on December 4th 2009 in Scripets and Treatments

Treatment #4

I missed a day, didn’t I? Sorry!

A switch in narrative focus shows us three thugs (Danny, Fab and Unzio) hanging out in an alley, talking quietly and looking nervous about something. Shortly, the leader of the thugs, Sal, shows up and beats up Danny for interrupting him while he was chasing tail. The thugs report to Sal that a dirty cop (Mike) is attempting to poach some of Sal’s people. The cop is holding a meeting, right this second, at a nearby chop shop. Enraged by this revelation, Sal takes the three thugs in tow and goes to confront Mike.

The meet is actually a setup. Sal steps into the chop shop, gun leveled at Mike and Danny stuns Sal from behind with a Taser. While Sal is unconscious, Mike ties him up with chains before hoisting him to the ceiling. Using an auto lift to raise a semi truck engine block high above the floor, Mike attaches a chain from the engine block to Sal’s legs. Mike tells Sal he brought this all on him self by being such a douche bag and Danny pulls a lever, releasing the auto lift. The weight of the engine block tears Sal in half. With Sal dead, Mike takes over the gang. Saying he has a girl he wants to impress, Mike asks Danny to help him move into Sal’s mansion.

Back at James’ apartment, James, Althea and Sam are going over the IA files Sam brought over looking for leads. With an assist from the shadows, James turns up the name “Kelly” and an apartment number for her.

James and Sam go to visit Kelly, who is a high priced call girl, with a black eye. She tells the men that Mike was her part-time pimp and full-time police protection. Sam asks when the last time she saw Mike was and she tells him it was when he stopped by for his cut. Kelly says that Mike beat her and hints that he raped her when she didn’t give him as much cash as he wanted. With some prompting, Kelly tells James that she thinks Mike has holed up with a dealer named Julio and gives him an address. James and Sam leave the apartment, cautioning her to stay home and lock the doors. Seconds later Mike kind of oozes out of the shadows behind her. Mike and Kelly talk and it becomes clear she told James what exactly what Mike wanted her to. Mike backs Kelly into a corner as they talk and then kills her with a knife.

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John on December 3rd 2009 in Scripets and Treatments

Treatment #3

If you are just tuning in for the first time, I’m posting a page of my treatment each day. This helps me out during my end of semester antics, and hopefully people will comment!

At Mike’s apartment (which is lit up nearly as much as James’), James first attempts to figure out where his brother has gone through conventional means. He searches the apartment for clues and compares pictures of the scene from a police file to the actual scene itself. Oddly, the pictures show Mike’s closet and dresser as both overflowing with clothes, but now all the clothes are missing. James calls the police station, but they haven’t entered Mike’s clothing into evidence. Frustrated at the lack of clues, James gives in and contacts the shadows, who once again refuse to answer questions about his brother. Desperate, James allows them to possess him to show him what happened to Mike. After the shadows have finished flowing into him, James’ blue eyes turn solid gray.

In a series of flashbacks, James watches his brother on the night Mike disappeared through the eyes of the shadows as a sort of detached observer. Mike receives a phone call from a man named Neil, asking Mike for help. Pulling a .45 from where it was taped under the couch and sliding a pair of wicked looking knives into his boots, Mike leaves the apartment. He drives to a strip club and goes inside. The doorman and bouncers at the club seem to know Mike, nodding to him as he passes and heads for a door marked employees only. Still an unseen spectator, James spots Sam at the club, and his new partner seems to be watching Mike. Passing through the door and climbing a set of stairs, Mike meets up with Neil, who owns the club, in a tiny apartment.

Neil is revealed to be a pimp and drug dealer that’s supposed to be under Mike’s protection. Shortly after Mike shows up, two thugs arrive at the apartment. They accuse Neil of being a police informant and threaten to kill him. As the thugs move to attack Neil, pulling out guns, Mike intervenes, pulling out the .45. The thugs easily disarm and defeat Mike, and turn their guns on him. Behind the thugs, the shadows are bouncing and boiling, agitated beyond anything we’ve yet seen. Faced with death, Mike calls on the shadows to protect him and they swoop in, possessing him. Bolstered by the shadows, Mike pulls the knives from his boots and kills the thugs, and then Neil for good measure. Before fleeing from the murder scene, Mike seems to turn and look directly at James. Mike smiles and laughs the creepy laughter of the shadows. His eyes are gray.

Back in the present, James accuses the shadows of stealing his brother and they laugh, telling him he should be grateful they saved Mike’s life. The shadows try to hijack James as well, threatening to visit Althea while in control of his body. Unable to drive the shadows from his body by force of will, James pulls the magnesium flare he threatened them with earlier from his pocket and holds it up in front of his own face before lighting it. The sudden brilliance forces them out, screaming in rage and James flees the apartment.

James goes to Sam’s house. Sam answers the door wearing a hockey mask, a Maple Leaf’s jersey and carrying a hockey stick. Seeming unfazed by this spectacle, James asks if he can come in. Sam admits him and the two men drink beer and watch the end of the hockey game. Game over, James asks Sam if he was investigating Mike. Sam eventually admits he used to be IA and that he was at the strip club on the night Mike was there. James tells Sam he knows about the murders and asks Sam to help him find his brother. Sam tells James that, no doubt, Mike was a dirty cop. He tells James that even if they find his brother, the best Mike can hope for is a long jail sentence. James agrees that is the best possible outcome, but still wants to find his brother. After some wrangling, James convinces Sam to hand over the IA files on Mike and to help find his brother before more people get hurt.

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John on December 1st 2009 in Scripets and Treatments

Treatment #2

Still out in the hallway, Sam attempts to enter the crime scene and is stopped by Rickles. Sam orders Rickles to get out of the way, but Rickles refuses. Rickles tells Sam that James likes to view a scene alone, at least for a minute. He asks Sam how many cases Sam has solved. Sam doesn’t immediately answer and Rickles tells him it doesn’t matter. No matter how many cases he’s solved, James has solved more. In fact, James has the best record in the precinct for solving crimes. Unhappy, but willing to give James a minute, Sam agrees to wait.

Alone in the apartment, we find James standing in the brightest spot in the room, a sunbeam coming through a window. This begins a motif. James will always attempt to stand, sit or linger in the brightest spot in a scene. If no bright spot is apparent, he’ll attempt to create one before continuing with other activities. So, standing in the light, James views the body of the murder victim. The corpse is of a large, black man wearing pink flip-flops that was shot in the chest several times. The shadows are whispering in the background, stirring the gloom with their movements. Addressing the shadows directly for the first time, James asks if they know who was responsible. The shadows say no and so James tells them to find out.

Oozing out of corners, from under furniture and through cracks in the walls, the shadows pool around the dead body. As they gather in one place, they seem to drain the color from the room, leaving it lit a stark gray. Pouring in through the corpse’s eyes, mouth and nose, the shadows possess the body, turning its milky brown eyes, gray. Partially animated, the dead man speaks to James, his voice that of the dead man in life, mixed with the whisper of the shadows. From inside the body, the shadows are able to tell James the name of the murderer. As soon as he’s heard the name he’s after, James orders the shadows to get out of the corpse. Initially, they refuse, offering instead to make the corpse dance. James threatens the shadows with a magnesium flare and, displeased, the shadows exit the body. James asks the shadows about his missing brother, but they don’t answer.

About that time, the door to the apartment slams open as Sam struggles his way past Rickles and into the room. Sam and James have a minor altercation over James’ antics, that ends with James promising to be more cooperative in the future. As James walks Sam through what he’s learned, the two men hear raised voices in the hallway and James goes to investigate. Rickles and the Hispanic building super are having an argument about the crime scene and just as James enters the hallway, Rickles loses his temper and slams the super against the wall. James tells Rickles to take a hike and, prompted by information gained from the shadows, James confronts the tenement super with allegations of child abuse. Cowed, the super backs down, but James tells him to expect a visit from child services.

Back at home that evening, James and Althea argue over his refusal to push the shadows to tell him where Mike has gone. James tells her that the shadows won’t tell him about Mike and Althea suggests he should make them show him. James is hesitant about this course of action, expressing concern over what the shadows might do if he lets them inside to show him past events. Eventually Althea convinces him to give it a shot and he leaves.

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John on November 30th 2009 in Scripets and Treatments

The Treatment

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So here’s the first bit of my treatment. I don’t think it’s too horrible to read. Feedback welcome on all of it, of course.

We begin in the past with a child version of our protagonist, James Voight, learning how to deal with the malign sentience of the shadows. The shadows desire human hosts to experience the pains and pleasures of the flesh, but they can only possess those that agree to serve them. To that end, they whisper ugly secrets and dark stories to James in an attempt to corrupt him. This plan backfires after the shadows tell him about his father’s extramarital adventures, and James discovers how to temporarily block the whispers out.

James’ communication with the shadows sets him apart from other kids his age, as seen by James playing alone on the playground at school. James learns the power of the shadows to incite aggression in the people that hear their whispers when he’s attacked by a pair of bullies. Alone and afraid, James sees the shadows moving behind the bullies and asks them to help him. The shadows respond by pushing him to answer violence with violence. He bites one bully on the leg and prepares to stab the other with a pencil when he’s saved from doing any serious harm to the bullies by the appearance of his brother, Mike. Seeming to enjoy himself, Mike chases the bullies off with mild physical and verbal attacks.  Later the same day, we learn that Mike claims not to believe in the shadows. He tells James that only crazy people hear voices. That night, though, we see Mike alone in his room, hiding from the whispers of the shadows by turning up the volume on his stereo headphones.

Here we flash 20 years forward to the present and find James asleep in bed with a woman. The apartment is lit up like the Fourth of July, in an apparent effort to keep the shadows at bay. The woman is introduced as Althea, his lover. Sitting down over breakfast with Althea, James talks briefly about his job, revealing the fact he is now a police detective, and looks at a newspaper. The paper is running a story about a missing police detective named Mike Voight. Althea presses James on Mike’s disappearance, and James’ flees the apartment, rather than talk about it, citing a need to meet up with his new partner. Althea is less than pleased with his behavior and reacts coldly as he goes.

James arrives at a rundown tenement building with his new partner, Sam Thompson, in tow. James and Sam are at the building to investigate a murder. In the hallway outside the murder scene James introduces Sam to Sgt. Rickles, a beat cop James is friendly with. Rickles points out Sam’s maple leaf tiepin, jokingly asking if Sam is Canadian. Sam replies that he’s a hockey fan and the pin represents his favorite team. As the three men are talking, forensics technicians begin leaving the crime scene and the last one out is Althea. In addition to being a tech, we also learn that Althea is the daughter of police Captain Leahy, James’ boss. James is called into the crime scene by Althea, who tells him that forensics hasn’t been able to find anything that might help solve the murder. She gives him a peck on the cheek and leaves.

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John on November 29th 2009 in Scripets and Treatments